Shriek

Brilliant. Your (revised piece) drips with beauty, and I am astounded. The descriptive language was wonderful--my gosh, practically each sentence was bursting at the seams with imagery. The narrator's

The first songs I learned on guitar were "Satisfaction" by the Rolling Stones and "What I Like About You" by the Romantics--those were pretty easy. The Beatles usually have some ...

I started off really liking the beginning--I'm a sucker for descriptive writing, and you wrote it quite well considering your age. After that, however, the story moved too quickly for ...