Shreksurmum

I really liked this, the language was good and i cant wait to read the rest of the chapter. now for the critism, your description and use of words was ...

Well, personally i think the story so far is great! now there was some grammar mistakes e.t.c but im not going to bother you with that because everyone else has, ...

Clumbo awoke to the sound of his parents watching the PBC (Penguin Broadcasting Company). Clumbo was a young male and he had only a few grey feathers left. He was ...

yeh, this was a great start! I really liked your language and the way you use words, although you do jumble them up, like: Arthur couldn’t have I wished for ...

I agree that you should explain that this Perosk is a fox, but i mean, if he lives in a fox village hes not going to be a bloody rabbit ...

For the Heak family the morning seemed like any other. The Penguin world was always the same. Mr Heak woke in the morning and kissed his wife on the cheek. ...