Shreksurmum

this was good, i like the idea of a man talling the story of his past, but there was room for imporvement. im not going into some 5 hour long ...

Clumbo and Luke slipped over the border unseen. They came to a small village after following a winding road. This village was also covered in ice. They walked into the ...

this was good, but there was ALOT of grammar mistakes and badly spelt words or words missed out e.t.c. before you put the stuff on, read it through to make ...

thanks for the advise, i should of checked through it, when i read it again i couldnt believe how corny it sounded, but anyway i have changed it now and ...

Clumbo was twisting in his sleep. He was having the dream of flying again when he reached a mountain. He flew up and up until he reached the top. He ...

thanx for the advise, oh and its Clumbo, not Mumbo

i liked this, especially the way you tell the story from the eyes of a cat. there were a few weird sentances but SirWozzell beat me to them, so all ...

i liked this, i was pulled into the story and i liked the plot, also now grammar mistakes! there is one thing i want to critique though, make sure you ...

i really liked this, your a great writer and a great poet as well! i like the plot and everything about the story. now for the critque He appeared to ...

this was good, i really liked it! but unforuently there was a few grammar mistakes and there was something i noteiced... Arthur began to argue but reconsidered when rex towered ...

i liked this story, the story as good and i couldnt take my eyes away. my only problem was in the first few paragraphs, it was billy this and billy ...

i liked this, not much was bad about it and i would like to here more of this, my only problem was The two embraced in the dark room, her ...

ok i've changed it so its better now

i liked this, but u got a bit confused, i dont think you explained enough. you say that Perosk picked up the gun and aimed it at this guy, and ...

this was a really good short story, the action was good and so was the dialogue. i really enjoyed reading this, but anyway, now for the critique i noticed that ...