Shreksurmum

plz review

I loved this as much as everyone else. i really like the way you destroy the whole idea of a wicked stepmother, she's actuallly trying to help. although there was ...

This was very good, i found few grammar mistakes, one thing i thought you could improve on was the bird and the cup. i thought that the cup was oscar ...

Clumbo picked up the sword, and followed Chat, he just hoped this wasn’t a trap. “You wonder if I am leading you to a trap young Clumbo? I can see ...

this was OK, but there was alot of grammar mistakes, and in words like wasn't why do you keep putting two t's? the idea is good, i like the whole ...

Clumbo shone his light over the dead animal. This must have been what had killed the soldier back along the path. It had three big black eyes and was totally ...

bad things now good things later I had, had it made especially for you, before I passed away. Is she speakin from the dead?? never ever leave it lying around ...

They had been following the muddy track for ages. Finally the Shnorg decided to set up for camp. When Clumbo had finished putting up his tent he went to see ...

first of all, i really liked the way you used characters in this, the whole cancelling each other out thing, anyway on to the crit They had to be lit ...

thats fair enough, but im pointing out other stuff i noticed, anything that sounds weird to me, im not being evil, im just trying to help P.S sorry for accusing ...

can u point out the i thing cuz i couldnt see nothing? fair enough i noticed some of the spelling mistakes you pointed out and changed them, thanx for that ...

r u just being mean cuz i pointed out stuff in your new 1st ch?

kk thanx alien, i read it over and redid this, i think it better now

swaying with the gently summer breeze swaying with the GENTLE summer breeze make sure it makes sense to you before you submit singing until there lungs exploded a bit far ...

your can really write poems! although, this confused me, i didnt know wht was meant to be happening. but it was written well ___________________ Four towers, three friends, one destiny ...