Shireling

THIOBS #1: A review "Nah..." Wiggins got that look on his face that always made me get mad. I stuck my tongue out at him. Tobey, seeing this, and recognizing ...

Whoa, whoa too much and in the wrong place! Hello, I'm Shireling and welcome to YWS, Prakash aka godofwar2k6. It sounds like you have some good ideas in there for ...

I skimmed through it really fast. It had so much description at the beginning that it turned me off it, but since you thought so highly of it I kept ...

Thanks for the review mikeyr, I'll take your suggestions into consideration. I decided to repost this in the Sci-Fi so I'll be adding to it there. Thanks again.

Thanks Adam for the review. As to why Dirk is unhappy working with a robot it's partly both reasons you mentioned, I might have to elaborate on that some more. ...

Future Soldier Major Dirk Douglas of the U.S. Marines sat stiffly on a hard bench in the belly of a military transport plane. He steadfastly watched a fire extinguisher on ...

How to make your Hero 3D is challenging, it is very easy to slip into stereotypes. What I am trying to do with my main characters, my 'Good Guys' is ...

Way cool! I read through the complete Sherlock Holmes last year and loved most of them. This has the sound of becoming a sweet fanfic. I can't wait to find ...

Rounding another flying boulder, he caught a glimpse of his objective. Roughly spherical except for a dish-like crater, a massive planetoid drifting along surrounded by a throng of smaller rocks. ...

Ah much better, I can crit this easier. The whole chunk was a little too much at a time. This is a pretty good beginning, you introduce the main characters ...

Hail Sir Wozzell, I bring thee greetings from the Shire. I skimmed through your story and I have to say you have some good material in there. I especially thought ...

9/10 Because I love Rachet and Clank too, just not as much as you...

1) How much do you read? The whole thing? A few articles? The announcements? I read all of it. 2) Do you try out any of the games on the ...

I concur as to what the previous critics have expounded. In this case more would be better. What you have is not really enough to even be a separate chapter ...

Thanks for the PM about the new chapter, it's another enjoyable addition. Here are my suggestions and comments. "What about school?" h e asked, seated at the kitchen table. The ...