Shinox

Nice story. I can see that most of the mistakes and etc have been pointed out to you. Keep writing! :D

Well I like fire, like setting things on fire sometimes :roll:, I just don't like huge gigantic fires. :D

A pair of unusual strange caring parents right? Rose = his mom. Marcus = his dad. All will be explained in time. . . : )

I was awaken as soon as I jumped into the icy blue lake. My overweight dog Fluffy ran up the stairs as soon as I finished tip-toeing to the bathroom. ...

Hi! I'll tell you some of the things I like and [s]dislike[/s]. Like: Naruto Tennis Anime Swimming Soccer Sushi Cake Snow Rain Blue Werewolves Dislike: Celery Spiders (Arachnophobia) Roller Coasters ...

Naruto! Of course, the mistakes have been already pointed out, so this will be short. Correct it! Keep up the writing! :D

Nice poem! It can relate to many of those with writer's block. :x That dreaded thing. I would take out got and replace it with a different word Two days ...

"Congratulations, Johnathan! You've won your 4th consecutive surfing championship!" It was the middle of July after my sixteenth birthday and I had once again, won the Sasso Surfing Championship. Ever

Thank you BigBadBear! Now that I've made that changes to the poem, it somewhat seems to flow better than before, possibly because it's without the f word. Much smoother poem ...

In a backyard of Chicago, Another wave has crashed, You're the only one that breaks away, In the same, We'll unite soon. I've got reasons to believe, You lied through ...

Nice. Drama, drama, drama. :) You could spice it up a bit with more action as Ihighton said; it's got a lot of feelings and emotions. Action was a bit ...

Not bad. It's original, or should I say something new and different from the normal stories. I've never read a story, on here at least, with the same idea as ...

Interesting story! The beginning could have been more detailed though, but it still works. I don't really think the old man was necessary, but again it does work. It doesn't ...

I liked it! I can't tell you any other mistakes, rather than the ones the others told you. Keep up the good work - please! :D

I was thrown headfirst at the window. Before I could break glass, I awoke with the sound of static. My dreaded alarm was demanding me to wake; I turned it ...