Shine

ITS A WONDERFUL PIECE OF WORK.Its very interesting and descriptive.You have let your imagination get high..... :) I really love your work. :D

I would have liked the 'Up Up' in one line and then in the forth line 'high'.I guess its long and simple,though its good. :) :) :) :)

'Chottor modhe bhalo'(Umm.. Erethror,does that comment now sound different. :lol:.Just not to confuse you,I would better write the translation of what I wrote in my language,it means "SHORT AND SWEET"

Good job! Its a interesting poem.I think there are no errors,other than the 'snowflakes'which is one word(I guess SnipSnip has already mentioned it) :)

Its GOOD!Probably because you have put your all feelings in it. :)

Nice and simple.Good job :)

Short,sweet and was a good idea to dedicate it to them.Good job :)

GOOD!but got to work on the things which Snoink has suggested on. Best of luck. :)

GOOD! but nothing special. Anyway its just a start,this may be your second poem(if I am not wrong),YOU CAN DO MUCH BETTER. :)

Honestly its not that good,I am not telling its totally very stupid but its like not up to the mark.Umm..lines of that football spirit should be there to make it ...

Honestly its not that good,I am not telling its totally very stupid but its like not up to the mark.Umm..linesof that football spirit should be there to make it sound ...

BLACK

Yeah right there are 12 of them right now!

A CHOCOLATE MILKSHAKE WOULD BE GOOD. TPBM WANTS TO CRY FOR SOME APPLES.

Yeah totally! TPBM has got something to do with a big BANANA!