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That was really sweet. Poem was really meaningful,I wish there was more of it. Umm..puntuations would have helped.

Hey Aspen Welcome to the site! The poem was very short & sweet. But as Incandescence says u have a long way to go. Keep writing! -Ani.

Hey welcome to the site! Have fun.

The poem was indeed sweet but it didn't have a definite plot. It lacks a bit of rythm,and the 9th and the 10th line is a bit too long breaking ...

My love for you both wakes me up lets me start anew, as at the same time you drift asleep, recollecting yourselves to wake up in a few hours once ...

Preety good.

Ah!the poem is actually very sweet. I think this would have gone under lyrics. The rythm was fine. The ending of the song is nice.

Yeah everyone was waiting for it.

I love it too,and the logo is cute. Nate is really cool!

Hey welcome to the site. Haha... welldone NAGS.

Yeah PARTY TIME! :elephant: :D Congratulations to u two.

The ending was touchy. Well done!

The poem lacks rythm,and lacks perfection. Begining was more or less good but the ending was bit something like rude/harsh. Keep writing,u have lots to learn.

lol ok, i liked it cuz it was something really different.

That was good(thats all i can say).