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Snoink said it all. I liked it but didn't get the last line. and yes should get rid of the brackets. Keep writing and posting. :)

You know you can make it much better if you rewrite it with more concentration. but I liked this part: With your words With your kisses With your soft touch ...

Crickets chirp outside an owl hoots frogs croak but he sleeps through this snoring on my lap. It needed some more puntuations. His body is so warm with each slow ...

After editing the last part its lot better . I definately liked it. Just one critique to make: the beauty of hope. My dreams of hope I didn't much like ...

Match up two people meaning? Match up randomnly,is it? and are we to comment on the match mentioned above?

Thats is indeed a good idea. Actually you can also play out your own written story in a programme or something like that.Here many of my friends do that.

Granted but now your pink pony is not feeling good. I wish I could meet Kitkat.

Granted,bed turns into a pink pony. I wish I could win the tennis match.:(

Glad you liked it.

Hello B-man. Welcome again to the site! This time make sure whatever you write do post here,even if it has mistakes we will help you out and then you can ...

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The ones inspired by YWS was cool. And I liked the porcelina ones. Good job!

The writers corner is up and rocking!

Yeah no I agree that publishing poems are much easier. Best of luck! ~Ani~

CONGRATULATIONS! its party time!