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Granted but now she forgets about the topic. I wish the vacation wasn't boring.

I liked this poem. I don't think so you need to change anything here. Well done! But yes where are the puntuations? Keep writing!

First of all where are the punctuations?Every line in this poetry looks to be a run on line...cuz there are no puntuations at the end of any line. Second of ...

That was really good Magyk.This is a very interesting story.I would also say that yes you do need a main character. And all other tiny errors has already been pointed ...

May my friendships always be 　　　　The most important thing to me; 　　With special friends I feel I'm blessed, So let me give my very best. I want to do much ...

WELCOME! WELCOME! WELCOME! :D

That was good...and descriptive. The only thing is in the begining the poem needs some more puntuations. Keep writing and posting! ~Ani~

Are u teaching some one A for apple and B for ball,in a different way? This was definately something weird a nd funny. Anyway try turning this into something else,that ...

Welcome to the site Ashley! by the way nice name. and yep this site is world wide. have fun! ~Ani~;)

Welcome Meera to the site! what kind of things do u write?

Milk..milk makes u stronger...lolz OR Its definately Pat Buchanan....cuz he is chocolatey.. :P

Hey! Meshugenah! WELLCOME BACK WE MISSED U A LOT!

WELCOME TO YWS KAYA!!:) I bet you will love this site...just keep posting and writing! If got any questions..feel free to pm me.

Granted ...you become a sweet potato...and everyone wants to eat u...oh my gosh! Ofour run for ur life!!!!AAAAA....... (just kidding) I wish I could have a castle.

there r two people difference ...lolz...