Shine

Heya aasics13189! Welcome to the site! This is Shine or Ani or Sayani.....:P see you around then. ~Shine~

Hey spiritblackwolf2705!! Welcome to YWS!! Hope you are liking this site. see you around then.:) ~Shine~

Thats kool!!:P

A teen girl is the narrator.

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Welcome to YWS!!

I'm pretty tense because this is the first poem which is very different from what I write. :? This was written in a hurry,I know I got to revise it ...

Hey thats just too good man!!

Hey Emily!! Welcome to YWS!! glad to have you here, if go tany questions feel free to pm me,I would try to help u out. And don't be nervous,lol,YWS people ...

Hey Chaotic Romance !! YWS Welcomes you to the site! this is just the perfect site for you I can assure you that. Keep posting your work as we would ...

It was simple and was kind of straight forward,so you can get the message easily. Keep writing and posting! ~Shine~

The idea was good and nice,but if you are trying to bring rythm into this poem,like you started off well with the first two lines,and then again in the second ...

In totallity I would say it was good. Though I would have liked some rythm into this poem. And yes the preface or the real picture is visible, I liked ...

Its flows very well,nice piece of work. The last paragraphs repitition did work out,Keep it up thats all i can say for now.:)

Welcome to YWS!! I'm Shine...or Ani...or too a high school junior.Would like to read your work. feel free to pm me if got any questions....I would liek to help you ...