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Nice work Nightsiren. Even to me the eye seems a bit off,may be it should have been a little smaller in size. But I like the hair,its colour,the blush you ...

Try putting in some more stronger emotions into it.I would suggest rewriting this with a nice flow and make it more explanative. Keep writing!

Nice short story indeed.I like reading articles like reality captured in words.Would like to read more of such work if you come across something interesting . Words are strong and ...

A nice short message in it.sweet. Keep writing and most importantly posting them here!

I agree with cupcake that it doesn't end the way you think it will.Well that was fun. Keep posting!

Its hard to put such emotions into words.I would say its flawless.Good job Toe. And talking about the last stanza I think its nice enough but I wish this piece ...

Thumbs up for this,firstly such a sweet and nice story which is blended into this poem,secondly it has got a nice rythym,the words tune along very well.Thirdly I felt as ...

In all a nice effort Eraqio. Someday I might look up without fear of falling, down isnt a direction, just a way of life. I’ve been so long without a ...

Hello YWSians!Well didn't get time to log in after joining college,not been here for like so long.anyhow I'm back :),hope i don't get busy again when college gets back after ...

Thats an interesting introduction "RainWanderer". Firstly Welcome to YWS! I think you will find a lot of people out here whose all first language is not english,so don't feel the ...

Welcome to YWS! Thats so nice of you that you helping out your friend,but it would have been nice if she had her own account,there is nothing to be shy ...

Dear you need to re do this I think,because there are numerous grammatical mistakes. From that first day, My goal was set When our eye s met I was like ...

Thats a nice piece.8.5/10! Do go for the spell check once before you post your work,it just takes some seconds. Its such a lovely work and those small unintentional typed ...

Hey Mira,Shanon,Ryan,Josh, Onyx!!!A big welcome to you all! I guess by now you did get use to the site,and how it works. If you need any help feel free to ...

Since its the 1st draft you can work on it more.You just can't start a poem randomly, perhaps you can but by the time the reader finishes reading the poem ...