Shaundeman

I liked it. Very well done. As it said in the title this was done for a contest, right? I think I get the gist of the contest, but I'm ...

To answer the question about the size of the piece, the contest asked for the work to be 150 words or less. I opted for the "or less." I figured ...

I walk it. I talk it. I even look it. This silly apron is nice…does it make my backside look big? Anyway, cleaning, cooking, and trying to discipline the kids. ...

So this story sounds interesting enough, however, it sounds an awful lot like X-Men. I'm not sure if that was your intention, but it is very similar. The school for ...

This will be brief. I just wanted to say that I liked it, but I didn't get the premiss. Did Belatrix (probably spelled wrong) have a daughter? A neice perhaps? ...

This wont be review length, but I just needed ot add my two bits. I wish to contend your point on Snape. I understand your point of view, but in ...

I liked that. I, personally, am not a poetry person by trade per say. I do novels more, but I saw your poem and thought I'd give critiquing it a ...

By: (pen Name) Oliver B.Hogg III I have a fancy squiggly stick Inside my bathroom stall. On the stick reside the best, My T.P. standing tall. Standing up, straight and ...

Yes I am. And If people read this and want to give me feed back on what they think about the idea please do. Basically the MC is a cop ...

FOR ANY, AND ALL WHO READ THIS. I MUST APPOLOGIZE, I ACCIDENTALLY POSTED MY UNEDITED VERSION OF THIS PIECE. I REALIZED IT TOO LATE. WITH YOUR COMMENTS, HOWEVER, I PLAN ...

I assume these are zombies you are writing about. I'm not sure how they are considered oxygen suckers, but I like that you are trying to veer from cliche titles ...

AFTER 98.6 “Sir, I have a report to make.” “Yes Sergeant, what is it?” “Intruders have been detected in Harry city,” The Sergeant replied. “What action has been taken against ...

I must say that upon reading this I was confused. I'm not sure what everything you said meant together, but each individual piece gave some really good imagery. I'm not ...

Good story. I feel like more could come from it though. I think that the being torn apart seen isn't descriptive enough. Not the guts and such, but the way ...

Personally I don't think that the tense of the story gets in the way of the presentation. I do, however, agree that it needs more tug to it. It's critical ...