Shallowdepth

The night air was silent. The industrious sound of the city was dead. The shadows loom and daunt your every step, every movement, every flicker of the eye. Not even ...

Wow, for a first attempt at poetry I say you pass with flying colors! My first attempt wasn't quite as good as yours that's for sure lol. Not the greatest ...

This was a very nice poem, reminded me of dreams I had as a child, which I suppose may have been the point lol. I love your usage of vocabulary ...

“So you can’t hear my thoughts?” He shook his head. “But you can feel them?” “That’s right.” My character/dream whom we have yet to find a name for moved his ...

Wow this was a great poem, very powerful. I love the structure of it as well as the vivid imagery. Combining the two elements all but accentuates the the words ...

Very simple yet so true. When you wrote I think, though correct me if I'm wrong, you were at that tranistioning age when one grows into young adulthood. And sadly, ...

I really liked this poem, and the last stanza was my favorite of all because that's totally how I wish I could be >< . A real underlying theme in ...

>< That totally sounds like me an my best friend. I really want to show her that now lol. This is a very wonderful piece, I liked it a lot.

It's every girl's dream isn't it? A deep, unshakable love ^^ this poem made me smile. Very beautiful, and a little sad at the end. I like the ending, though. ...

I jackknifed up into sitting position as my eyes searched for the source of the voice. You know how in the back of your mind you kind of know there ...

I LOVE the structure of this poem, the random lines, the segments. Great way to do it. Lol that makes me what to try and write something like that =) ...

Wow that was really good. I like how you kind of use the words to lead the reader into a certain direction and leave the rest to the imagination lol ...

Me likey a lot =) the only thing is there are a few typos that you might want to fix up real quick so other people don't pester you about ...

Nice job ^^ i wish I could write haikus like that, but everytime I try it, well, it looks more like a machine forcily crammed words into a stanza lol. ...

Even thought its simple, there's a true beauty in its simpleness =) I liked this poem a lot. For a first try at a love poem this was great ^^ ...