Shakyll

Really good. Your descriptions and wording are excellent. I love your description of the guard, and of his nametag. And the description of her injury is really awesome. Basically, I ...

Definitely keep it moves kinda too fast, though. Maybe slow it down, give more details and explanation. But I like it! keep it up.

Really creepy, and really excellent.

i like :] it's good...just one thing, you used the word "alfa" but I think you mean "alpha." Other than that...I really like it. The technical computer stuff in the ...

Really good, very creepy and disturbing. This is every girl's nightmare, and you captured it. Really good.

hmm, I'll work on it.

Sounds really captures what a lot of people feel. I love it. I love the style you wrote it in, jerky and separated. Really, really good.

Fear-scent. Smell of sweat. Choking. Bodies pressing against me. Snorting, neighing, screaming, clanging—fear-scent. Pain. Deep ache in my belly. Fear-scent. What is happening? I smell my own fear.

Pretty cool :) a few typos, though--first paragraph, *seams, instead of seems. *seen, instead of scene. *next hundreds of questions, instead of just next hundreds questions. *that's, instead of thats.

This was very dark, rather depressing, and epically brilliant. I LOVE IT. Your descriptions (for example, the first paragraph) are amazing. Just one thing--I think that in the last paragraph, ...

aww, poor ant! :) This was really well done and entertaining to read.

This is really excellent, and one of the truest things I've ever read. But some heroes aren't so brash--a lot of times, the real heroes are inconspicuous and therefore we ...

This is really interesting...I'm guessing that she/he is speaking of their boy/girlfriend and the obviously wild love they share? It's good. I like it.

Crescent: Thanks. Your criticism makes a lot of sense. I'm glad you gave it. Am I allowed to edit it right now or do I need to leave it like ...

fantastic. I could read it over and over again. It's almost dark and despairing, but there's a tinge of hope as well. Really, really good. This would make any New ...