Shakyll

cookEmonster: thank you! :D carboncore: well see, her point wasn't to look good. Introducing jealously of women on tv/magazines would have been irrelevant for her, because she didn't care about ...

Name: Masakka Dan Gender: Male Age: 30 Appearance: Tall, lean and muscular. Long blond hair pulled back into a ponytail. Handsome, with cold blue eyes. Skills: Very good with horses ...

awww I love it :3 just one thing...I was kind of confused about the prologue part. I didn't see where her memory ended and the rest of the story picked ...

this was really good...very fast paced and interesting to read. suspenseful and captivating. a few typos, but not many. i really want to read the next chapter ^^

Wow. This is impressive. How did you do it?

This is really good...I'm guessing that he was the one who killed them but didn't remember it? kind of like Nikki in Heroes? I really like it...your descriptions of his ...

Really interesting prologue/first chapter :] Just one thing--I did wonder how old Miss Bertolli was...you said she was a young woman but that could anywhere from 13 to 25...just a ...

ohhhhh this is good. and it's so true. smashingly heartbreaking reality. very good. your wording is excellent, your sentence structure is awesome. brilliant.

This is very, very good. I wish I could show this to every teenager in the world who thinks they're not worth anything. :] I love it. It seems exotic, ...

Wow. This, was really intriguing. And it ended on a cliffhanger--it definitely leaves us wondering what's going to happen next. Really good. One thing I wondered--is her her boyfriend, or ...

This is really beautiful and flowing--I just don't really get what you mean by "it is a rare opportunity to be a part of it." ? Other than that...it's a ...

This is really good. I love how you alternate--first a few lines of words, then a few lines of descriptions. I love this part-- So silent, this room. His sobbing ...

This one was really great. One thing I questioned, the beginning where she kisses the cross, isn't that edging toward having an idol? Even if it represents Jesus Christ, she ...

This is really good. I like how he says that she should believe in him right before he reveals himself. One thing I wondered...does she know Ethelred personally in her ...

It's good...kinda hard to get the point of it, but I like it. It's good how you said "inch by inch by inch" when typically people say "inch by inch", ...