Shakyll

Is this going to be in Chat or on a forum?

wow. this was really awesome. A little confusing with all the Alena parts... I was kind of confused as to what was going on. Might want to clear it up ...

"His words string out like a poem, His eyes are rich like oceans" ^^ Very nice lines. I love how you describe our Savior with such feeling for his compassion ...

VERY nice. :)

Masakka Dan I followed Morgan, sneering inwardly. I had better keep up? Like that was a difficulty. "So," I said. "That sounds like quite a spell." Morgan stopped. "You were ...

Masakka Dan I watched the King sourly. Goldilocks indeed. "I'm sure he won't hurt us," I said in a civil tone. "He won't even try. Goldilocks is feared everywhere he ...

Thanks both of yew.

thanks :D You've given me some stuff to work on ^^

This will be my last confession You have my heart wrapped in iron bars Blackened by your hands, bleeding from your wars Why so forbidden? Love has vanquished me For ...

awww!! I really love this. You really caught the feeling of initial insecurity some girls have when they see "hot" models, and then you turned around and captured the compassion ...

Creepy. But that's why I like it. :) One thing--the word pupils is a little awkward. Check out some synonyms, maybe. I'm guessing this is about a person who's trying ...

Masakka Dan I ran swiftly through the city, cursing my bad luck. Blade was lame, all the other horses were slow and snappish. I had to catch up with Morgan ...

Reminds me of Tangled. :)

Wow. This is quite interesting. I'm guessing that it's a teenage girl from a broken home who's been driven to insanity? It caught my attention really well. A couple of ...

I love this.