Shadowstalker

Thanks for the review heh. The first attempt at this subject i made, I got shot down for giving the kid a history and a description and all that. Now ...

A soft cough makes the lad look up, and then his eyes widen and he tries to get away from her. The her with a long cape swirling around her ...

After scanning through the poem, since it didnt' really catch my eye you know, was rather dull to tell you the truth, one part jumped out at me. In hopes ...

Good use of imagery, well done with that part. They don’t need dark Cellars or attics Only my thoughts And memories. The first part of the poem that actually caught ...

Wonderful. I liked it, riveting, to steal a word. Although, the first part sort of...doesn't really fit in with the rest of your story, you know? Well, not really, it's ...

Yeah....it's bland, it's not all that exciting and the spelling...ugh. Beaken us to come beckon, not sure why it's capitalised either. seagals seaguls, you were right Merv. He covered most ...

I like it, well done. Hehe, you brought out, what I feel, to be the futility of asking an inanimate object something that you really should figure out for yourself. ...

Hmm...i'm not sure, it's not exactly a narration of events now is it? And yeah, the ending is a bit abrupt. It's all well and good to have an 'abrupt' ...

Um...Okay. Long winded, and not all that riveting or curious or anything of the sort. I read maybe half of it and then skimmed to the end. I don't really ...

Very good, I agree. But...try not to get your tenses mixed up. Other than that, it was great. Who are the 'immortals that don't understand' by the way? That just ...

Not too bad, good meaning behind the poem, or so I believe. But there are a few glitches here and there. A blue bird, a butterfly, a ray of sunlight, ...

“Eleanore!” The outraged feminine screetch echoed through the stone halls, bouncing off the statues and reverberating through the rooms to the intended receiver. “Eleanore!” Came the shriek ag

Point one, I'm aussie, you're yank. Which means 'neighbourhood' is spelt correctly, for me. Point two, I wrote it at 11pm, after being up since 6 the previous morning. Thinking ...

A soft cough makes the lad look up, and then his eyes widen and he tries to get away from her. The her with a long cape swirling around her ...

Point number one; paragraphs! Dont give the read massively big blocks of text to wrestle their way through. Point number two; CATCH THEIR ATTENTION. First paragraph is VITAL and quite ...