Shadowstalker

Blind, Bound, Bleeding. Red hot pain removed my eyes; I am Blind. Burning coarse ropes bind my wrists behind, bind my ankles together, hold my flesh unkindly; I am Bound. ...

Now now, I didn't scold and belittle -your- poem Cornelius, I complimented it as having a good -idea-, just the way it was written was a bit off. And judging ...

I didn't get it. I didn't really like it either, some parts are good but... Yeah, I'm not one of the religious sort, but to me 'god-breathed' seems a bit ...

Edited. And the double -- thingies is sort of like a hitch in the sentence, more than a ; but not a : its...where it changes subject slightly, but not ...

So that should be a warning that this isn't an exactly polite poem, but by far it isn't as crude as his, not as...coarse in the language. I just wanted ...

Written earlier, but oddly enough, much better than your chapter four. A much better fight scene, well done. My only problem is the reference to March and January. For me, ...

Ugh, okay. First off, the level of ...shall we say events that occured in this -one- chapter should rightly be spread across about three, at least. In my opinion, the ...

I like it, and just to be different and argue with people, I wouldn't change a thing...although it was the last two/three lines that made me like it. For me, ...

Hrm...this is...um. I'm not quite sure how to critique it or anything of the sort. It doesn't have a rhythm (How I hate that word! I'm never sure how to ...

Thanks. I'll try to rewrite the introduction and all... could you give me an example perhaps of why, and where, it needs editing? Ta SS

It was um....yes. um. Some parts are good, others are -really- bad...like, the first 3/4 of the second massive stanza thing. That's the main part I didn't like, ironically, the ...

It’s a time beyond memory, a time beyond reason. A time where the good guys are allied with the bad guys and the bad guys are just wrong. When every ...

"Figures." Alasani muttered, struggling out of the cargo net that was currently keeping a very stubborn grip around her legs. Several minutes later she's just as badly tangled, but upside ...

Well written, in the majority, and considering that I haven't read anything else apart from this one scene, fairly good character developement, of Aine at least. One minor complaint though, ...

Could I join? And if not, like Jasmine said, ignore my bio. Name: Alasani (last name forgotten) Age: 15 Appearance: Scrawny, a tiny tyke with short cropped black hair, wavy, ...