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I liked your story alot, but there were a few typos. You didn't capitalize after a period, otherwise nothing I can see. I look forward to more of your stories, ...

I say exactly what Sleeping Valor said. GREAT JOB! ST

Thanks guys you've all been a great help. I'll get to work on fixing as soon as possible. :) Thanks again, ST

I really loved reading your prologue. But I did notice a few typos. Can't really remember where exactly, plus I'm not always the most helpful. Anyways, keep up the good ...

:twisted: EVIL! HEH, HEH! Awsome! Anyways I agree with SirWozzell. Not scary enough. ST

Great story, but you left out some words or used the wrong ones. You also need to space out the sentences a little. It was hard to read for me. ...

I agree with the others, but there are more than just spelling errors, you didn't place commas in some areas where they are needed.

I'm with Adnamarine and Seraph on this. Otherwise it's really good. I look forward to reading more of your literature. :P Shadow :wink:

Umm... you should probably shorten it a little, because that is waaay too long and gets on people nerves sometimes :?. Otherwise your story is captivating. :)

Hidden Secrets Prologue Lightning flashed, escorted by the sound of an army's horses beating across the barren landscape. Even as the heavy rain mixed with their sweat, the army rode ...

A few typos but that was amazing. It probably is'nt very important but I'd like an image in my mind from the story. Most people do. The story held within ...

I was entranced by your story. My only concern is...the picture. I couldn't quite grasp what the characters looked like. Detail is needed for a feeling possessed image. But otherwise ...

Hey I'm new! All my friends call me ST or Theif :twisted: Pick one I don't care. I hope you guys will read my stories! :smt110 The insperation for my ...