SerenityCross

Hey. The only thing I had a problem was if Riley was a boy or a girl. Riely usually isn't a name I accociate with a girl. But, hey what ...

Hey. Great story. I think it was great how you've just launched us into the story like that. I can't wait to read more!

Wow. A very good start. I have a few problems though... I feel like I've missed something between the first and second paragraphs and that threw me off. I don't ...

Oh wow! I love the fact that the story starts with a life and a death at the same time! I just have one small question: How does the nurse ...

Hey could you please review my work? I don't know the link but it is called Guardians Chapter 1 and it is a fantasy novel. Thanks a bunch :smt003

Chapter One: History Felicity Weather-Spoon stared blankly at the white board at the front of the room. The teacher, a short, fat man who looked like he belonged in a ...

Thanks so much for your help! I am working on the next xhapter as we speak, and should be up later today. I look forward to your reviews!!

Hi! I love the cliffhanger. It makes people want to read more. :) I could actually phisically see the scene playing out in my head. You never actually said what ...

Very cool. Most of my stories involve the elements, but they have never actually talked before. I admire you for doing something different and original. Are you working on the ...

Very Cool. Can't wait to read more. You have some punctuation errors, but the rest is cool.

Prologue: Midnight Murder Midnight, Aswalle City: The skyscrapers glittered as they reflected the light coming from the cars and shops below. Three people stood on top of the skyscraper. One ...