Seraphim

Welll i like the plot but You need more detail. I also tihnk that the angels not knowing how to work human things is kind of lame. But please write ...

Looks interesting so far. I don't know really what to tell you except to watch out for the run on sentances. Please write more

I'm sorry to anyone eho has read this but I am kicking the idea. But I have a better one that I am working on so don't worry.

The Goddess of Love and the Goddess of Soul were wed. And they lived happily after forever… and ever. Right there I think you ment to write God of love. ...

Personaly I like to write in first person but I can read either. I wouldn't mind writing in first person but I'm not that very good at that :(

Sounds like she is aristocratic and very rich but isn't stuck up because of it Arcanum

Thank you both for your help

editing

I really like this and it has a nice twist. However it was a little confusing at times and the attachable re-tachable wing I'm not feeling it that well but ...

I liked it very much, but still you need more depth into it like everyone else said.

Looks good do far; few grammatical mistakes but it happens to the best of us.

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This is really good but like Cade said try to make the expirences in the poems a little more personal so it will hook your readers

You can jusst call me seraphim I am 13 going on 14 in 21 days I love to write My favorite topic to write about is the never ending batlle ...

Like the others said kput in more detail whithout giving too much away but still a good start and souonds interesting.