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Times done Nanowrimo:0 NaNo name: K.L. Stowman Genre: Satirical, parody, comedy. Plot: A person having writer's block. :)

Hello, Reuben. :D No. I did not get across. the elders used a device, carved out of stone, an arch, great gargoyles on either side, like pillars. Their tongues stick ...

Hello again, Kevzta. :) He staggered to the log, dragging the small carcass with him, where his friend, Mark, waited for him. This doesn't make sense; the rabbit isn't long ...

Hello, Kevzta. :) The bird plummeted to its death. I think you can expand this into a paragraph, give us more of an introduction. :) The hare nibbled on a ...

Hello, Nariel. :D I'm going to critique your work. :D:D:D There’s something big happening and the world is looking around for help. Hm. I suggest you expound; it sounds like ...

Hi there Natalie. :) Such a young age. I ‘d so many plans for the future and now that is all turned to dust. I will never again be able ...

What up mon ami. :D Loved Shiva's statement at the end there. XD Freaking hilarious. Hm. There were only a few things I saw in this piece. The beginning was ...

The beginning is a little lacking in details. What does Josette feel at her father's funeral? What does she think? Towards the middle it picks up and becomes more interesting. ...

Hm. Well, to me, it sounds like describing a horse race from TV. You see them run, but there's not nearly as much exhilleration as if you're actually there. ;) ...

Just letting you know, there is a book called the Dark Angel. ;)

Hm. That's an interesting idea. I think I'll put that into play. Mwahahahaha.... :D

Mkay. That makes sense. :D:D:D Thank you for the advice. :D:D:D:D:D

I want to give my story a sort of haunting/creepy feel, but I'm not sure how to do that. Any suggestions?

The first few paragraphs are rather large, and make the story seem like it's too much to read. :) If you break a few of those up, I will crit ...

Missed what you wrote at the bottom :D Hm. Since you already have them written out, maybe you spice them up a bit. Just some... little quirk that no one ...