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You're most welcome. :D Don't worry, it's easily fixable. Oh, I will check my messages then. :D

Hey there, Shayna. :) First off, I suggest you break this into smaller paragraphs so it's easier to read. :) I suggest you build up to the skateboard accident, like... ...

How goes it, Rothwise. :) The first two paragraphs are very revealing, but they don't seem to fit in with the rest of the situation. Lex laughed and pushed hair ...

Hello, Merry. I'm going to give you a line by line crit. :D In the heavens, angels of all ages, conversed with each other about different things. How life is ...

Well, I could tell you more, but I think it would give away the plot, or the main idea, or.. whatever it's called. :D More will be revealed, I just... ...

Thanks for the crit, Blink. :) I didn't realize it was so unclear in some parts. ^o^" This prologue is about twelve pages long, so, some things will be revealed. ...

This is one of my favorite things I've written; so I'm doing this YESNO kind of thing about crits. Obviously the yes won. :) Prologue *** “Quickly, in here.” Silvani ...

Whoa, hold on a minute. You don't have to answer our questions like this. We'll be able to see it unfold in your story. :)

You are most welcome. :) Your first fantasy? :) That's good- it's good to write in different genres; helps expand your writing skills. :)

Thanks again. :D I'm not sure how the next par will go. Lot's of kinks to work out. ^o^"

Hello, Dragnet; I'm going to give you a line by line crit. :D Her long, flowing white dress, dark hair and violet eyes hidden by a silver mask drew all ...

Thank you so much, White. :) I felt it was rushed as well, though I wasn't sure how to fix it. I could put a description of Anyu in this; ...

Beautiful. Truly beautiful work, Etain. :) I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. :D Just a couple things I noticed: It glanced from side to side. The sweeping planes below and the ...

Well, this is sort of a random/blah/whatever idea I'm messing around with. I like it, but it feels like there's something missing. >

Hello Telle. :) I'm going to give you a line by line crit. :) The Elders are seated on tall silver chairs Here you used present tense. It should be ...