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Not sure about the flow... but then, only dead fish go with the flow.... ;) *** Horsa and his little lectures. Nova rolled her eyes, blowing her hair out of ...

NO!!! Please come! There's cake, uh, I need some company!!!!!!! (your quote) I'm sorry it bothers you Ayra. :( That situation is part of a chain of events, and is ...

Break this up into two posts, because the length is very daunting :) :D:D:D:D:D

Break this up into two posts, because the length is very daunting :) :D:D:D:D:D

You need to break up your paragraphs and put spaces between them. At the moment it looks like a chunk of solid words, and people go :thud: when they see ...

OH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I see why that's confusing now... yeah I'll fix that :D:D:D:D:D:D

Hi ^o^V The town was intensely quiet; the only sounds were the steady hum of traffic in the distance and the occasional footsteps on the pavement. All was so still ...

No no no, Kyte, there IS a fantasy element here, I promise. I can't tell you when how or why at the moment, because that would give everything away, and, ...

Uh......... not sure what to call it, but it is fantasy, I promise :) ^o^V Nova jerked up, banging her head on the low ceiling. That stupid dream is going ...

Hello Pawprint :D:D:D:D:D: I noticed a couple of things (trying to keep it short and sweet here) "Your Highness, the princess is missing!" Nurse Mira breathed after her run to ...

Well, practice makes perfect :D Since this is the exciting part, I did try to tone it down a little. I know those parts are like blood, sweat, then OH ...

Alright. First, this stereotype of Clarke is so common, it simply doesn't work anymore. I suggest you use something more rational than spilling grape juice, such as "Oh, the history ...

First off, you keep switching the point of view too much. It's hard to tell which is the main character. The afternoon sky soon became dark. The ominous cloud was ...

NO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! /cry /beg /become the most pathetic mess at Fangala's feet. Fangala: /ew.... :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D Just kidding. Yeah, everyone needs

.... .......... Really, REALLY creepy. I had a dream similar to this. *Shudder* HAHAHA Now you've inspired me to write about my dream. Unfortunately, the dreams I remember don't make ...