SeraphTree

Well, you know... sometimes the only decent company is yourself :D:D:D:D

One thing I forgot to mention.... This sounds a lot like Alice in Wonderland ***I^o^I***

V^o^V Atop of a big green hill there was a house. This house was a big house. There where over 35 rooms. Its was enormous. In this house there lived ...

I agree with Gwen. There is so little to go on, we're left very much in the dark. X( Also...... I wouldn't jump in with the statement that 'dragons are ...

you need to space between paragraphs. As soon as you do that, I'll crit for you :D:D:D:D

I didn't read through it all... :smt011 but I can tell that this piece needs more thought bubbles and dialogue. You said you're tired of it???? Why don't you write ...

That's cool. Maybe you should write things like Seinfeld. I think you would be a great stand up comic. -.-* I know what you mean about crits. I haven't gotten ...

First, this sounds WAY too much like Harry Potter. I suggest you change some things. :) William said calmly; as the man turned slowly, still kneeling to fully face them, ...

Hmmm. It's a bit rushed, and in the middle you switch to Reok's point of view. I suggest you drag it out more. Kill us with suspense. That's always interesting.... ...

You could actually add an interesting struggle there; for example, maybe Ayra CAN use the wings, but it's extremely difficult to use them without going into Second Form, or the ...

Okay... Im' back. :D:D I looked to the ground and was not surprised to see a life-size plastic pony prancing about on the grass. “We need your help!” she hissed. ...

When I come home, I will crit this :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Sorry that it's taken so long... been busy and lazy. :D:D:D:D:D Not sure how it is. It sounds a little choppy. :) *** Iistengel turned away in disgust as the ...

Just curious... :D:D:D:D Hmmmm..... do you think she can learn to use them? It might be helpful in those tight situations. I mean, going into second nature sounds exhausting.

Hm. There's not very many details, and we don't know where these people are. I mean, it's obviouls they're at school, but are the in class? Did school just end? ...