SeraphTree

YES!!!!!!!!!! PLEASE read Songwood Part II. *not saying that the crits I received are bad* More is better!!!! Also Jerrsea'ya in Action Fic. :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D *bows, adores Monki* You know, I ...

GOOD!!!!!!!!!! Wow you are cheerful. I think it's rubbing off on me :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Yeah, you can invite him. :D:D:D:D:D I don't see why there would be a problem. :D:D:D:D:D

Hi :D:D:D:D:D:D:D All intruders are to be killed? What the hell is that all about? The villagers just glare straight ahead at me, and I can’t help but shudder a ...

Well, if someone steals your work, it will be obvious. And since it will be obvious, people won't read their work, or they'll say "uh, this is too much like ...

:thud: We have no details here. Where are these people? Is the sky lavender? Is the horse spotted? (These are just examples :D) She sat upon a mighty, noble steed. ...

Okay… looks like I can crit after all. Lawrence blinked the sleep out of his eyes. It was hard to stay awake in an environment as the one he was ...

Alright, I'll se what I can do. At the moment, I can't really crit X(

CHAYONZ!!!!!!!!!! :elephant: :smt039 So good to hear from you! I was beginning to get worried.... :D Tradhalem was much bigger than Rovenhold and metal barred gates surrounded the city, but ...

THANK YOU. I really didn't realize that part was so confusing. -.-* I'll rewrite the fight scene, make things more clear :D... Oh, and some things will be explained later. ...

As Jabber said, we don't know very much about Dora's friend. To me, she sounds like a really bad friend. I mean, this guy is about to rape Dora, and ...

Okay, I'm back........ sorry about that X( Silence had earned Markali another set of lashings. The smell of the blood covering his back and pooling on the cell floor around ...

Hmmm..... I'll see if I can make that part any clearer... :)

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I'll crit when I come back :D:D:D:D