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Re: Land of Sky, Land of Rain (Chapter Nine)
Again, a bit of rambling [Now I'm listening to 'Alone' by Heart XDXDXD]. Couldn't really get into it. I mean, KORETH IS DYING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! So... yes. :D I'm getting kind of ...
Mar 1, 2008 -
Re: Land of Sky, Land of Rain (Chapter Eight)
Hm. My only dealio was that it rambled a bit. :) I also expect to see more distress from... the MC [I never found out her name] How ironic. I'm ...
Mar 1, 2008 -
Re: Supermarket story - INTRODUCTION - parts yet to be added
:D *** “But I really need the toilet mum!” whinged Kelly, particularly emphasising the word “need”. This didn’t matter to mum, she just let the comment pass her by. *** ...
Mar 1, 2008 -
Re: i had to delete this!!!
*** We looked at each other for what felt like hours, all I could do was look deep into his big purple eyes . w e were wolf-demons , so ...
Mar 1, 2008 -
Re: chapter 4
* She awoke to find she was now alone in her bed. Though she dreaded getting up, she knew she had too. * This is too much telling. :) * ...
Feb 25, 2008 -
Re: My Library Boyfriend
"We all" is inaccurate. You sent apologies to the other people [I assume] but on these particular posts you have seemed unrelenting in criticizing them. I didn't know you had ...
Feb 17, 2008 -
Re: Death to Riches
:D Destruction is bliss Thy destruction is greater than thy hate Spite thee and thou shall depart from life A few mistakes. :) Upon the city of Naethr, a chill ...
Feb 17, 2008 -
Re: Abarith: Seekers of the Arcane Throne (Prologue)
:D The boy had a perplexed look upon his face at seeing the soldiers fall to the ground lifelessly, “Big brothers, why do you play dead? I want to play ...
Feb 17, 2008 -
Re: A Story Pt 1
Whoa!!!!!!!!! Please look at your spacing. :) Also... because it's so long, I suggest you break it into two parts. :)
Feb 17, 2008 -
Re: My Library Boyfriend
I also sent you a PM about spaces. It's so your work is easier to read. Otherwise it looks like one solid chunk. Pippo, we are trying to help you. ...
Feb 17, 2008 -
Re: My Library Boyfriend-carrying on
Pleas space between paragraphs. Then I will crit. :D:D:D:D:D:D:D
Feb 13, 2008 -
Re: Gay is My Ex
Well, your sexual orientation at that age usually isn't a conscious thing, because, well.... you know. *Seraph's sheepish grin* :D Hm. I'm not sure you should use that. I mean, ...
Feb 2, 2008 -
Re: Gay is My Ex
MONKI!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D We shared snacks and naps and secrets and our first kiss. We lived, laughed, and loved together. ?? If he's gay, why did he kiss h
Jan 31, 2008 -
Re: My heart
:D:D Tears escaped from my eyes, and I didn't like it so became my emo self again and released my pocket knife from my pocket to slit my wrist to ...
Jan 29, 2008 -
Re: True Love
Interesting. :D I think you could be a bit more descriptive in the verses. :D Thats all I can think of :D :smt051 *Seraph*
Jan 25, 2008