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This is ridiculous in the good kind of way! I couldn't stop laughing the whole time I was reading this! My favorite part is definitly when Steph Meyer popped up ...

Sometimes I think my sister hates me. I'm sure it's because I'm something she can't fix. Ever since Mom and Dad died, Autumn started cleaning, organizing, and making things perfect. ...

I think it symbolizes Pamela's (the owner of the umbrella) personality. And also I really like polka-dots :)

I agree with OrangeNailpolish. You have a lot of dialouge in this chapter. I would like to see more of what everything looks like. Can't wait for the next chapter! ...

Thank you for pointing out some of the mistakes I made. I'm usually an avid past tense writer, and switching to present is kind of tough. Also to answer some ...

I liked it. The beginning really hooked me into what the rest of it's about. But you might want to remember: FANBOYS For And Nor But Or Yet So It's ...

Ahhh! This made me so sad! I myself am I a ravid Twilight fangirl and was pratically devastated when Edward left. I think you've really captured what Bella was feeling ...

As some people might have told you already, you kind of put your diolouge into one whole paragraph. It will be easier to read if you seprate it. But this ...

AHHHH!!! Oh thank you so much! This is more like a rough copy of chapter one so I haven't realy revised it, but thank you for spotting those mistakes. I ...

This is the new novel I'm writing. I already have three or four chapter written. It's really not that good, but whatever. :) One The first time I see her, ...

This is really good! I've always tried writing poems that rhymed, but they never turn out that well. :) What I liked best about your poem is that the words ...

I like how you used the repetition in the poem. Also the imagry was amazing. I always look for poems that have good imagry.

I've always had trouble transitioning things. And there's a reason why Joz can play piano really good without learning. It's part of the plot though so it's pretty much a ...

Thank you! I will rewrite as soon as possible.

"Josie, hon, we're about to leave for the city soon. Darling Claire will be here to take care of you so don't worry." Those were the parting words of Josie ...