Schemilix

Chapter 1 "Preposterous; no man could ever devise such a wondrous contraption!" Alicia exclaimed. Earlier that morning they had been informed that a man - a man! - had invented ...

OH! I like this a lot! Very original concept, and good usage of repetition on the ending lines. I take it you like the colour black? The ending line is ...

Wow, my first impression of this was definitely a good one. Nice rythm, doesn't stray from it much, the rhyming for the most part is natural, which I know is ...