Schemilix

Awww. It made my spine tingle. It's very sad, and heartfelt. 'I lost my angel not so long ago' that is such a... heart-wrenching line. It's beautiful, and my favourite ...

He awoke to a face he didn't know, with a bed under him that he didn't know and a metallic scent in the air that he also didn't know. The ...

Now quite a few of these are raw sketches done straight with a ballpoint. There's one thing I'd like you to bear in mind please: I'm terrible at people and ...

Yeah I agree the wench sucks. I'm doing a post with my character doodles and those should be better. I might take the wench down, she's not my best. *Rubs ...

None of these are anybody/thing, I'm making a thread specifically for characters/story sketches at some point. This thread may grow if I doodle randomly and like it. Haha.

Yeah I guess I'll do that with the next one... It'd be neater too.

Nice job. Serious, but not overly bitter, nor overly lyrical. It will destroy us, Until the world is empty. Now this line I wasn't so sure about, it kinda jarrs. ...

Chapter 2 moved to its own thread.

I pretty much addressed all that, thanks! ^^

...Win. ... *Tries to find some fault to help with* ... ... No. ... I loved it, heh. I love how he's all confused and doped up, though the short ...

'and it's only recently that I've stopped thinking: "I learned this when I was four" during science. ' Haha, me too. Except, it was books, not shows. And yeah I ...

Hee, I love the theme. A little more to say about this one, it goes a bit... well i kept tripping over it. 'Woven together in movement's trance.' I don't ...

Right. My forte lies in poetic analysis, not prose, so I hope you don't mind that I stick to reviewing your poems for now? Actually. *Reads* I really like that! ...

Hmm. Not bad I guess. One thing: your erm, title. Reminds me of a Haddaway song. Which is now in my head. Badly. Reeeeeeeegardless, allow me to get the nit-pick-o-matic ...