Schemilix

I'm going to just point out that flow is not a necessity of poetry and thus ignore that statement since it;s clearly a difference of taste. Not all of my ...

Alright, let me teach you how to critique properly darling. The first thing that strikes me is that this poem is one BIG cliche, so I can't say much about ...

I'm going to just point out that flow is not a necessity of poetry and thus ignore that statement since it;s clearly a difference of taste. Not all of my ...

If you follow the rainbow across the world, Over mountains and under seas, If you follow the ribbon through the changing skies You'll reach the end, they say. They're right ...

I can tell that was meant to be funny and... It was! XD I snorted a couple of times. Wait what whuh? They named him when he first spoke? Poor ...

Kitty I have to point out the irony here. 'For affect?' That's a grammar slip in itself, hahaha. Now Arcaus 'm not gonna critique because you seem to dislike it, ...

I was born from the dream of a man from another world. A man with hair as dark as a raven's wing slouches along a street formed by red dust ...

I don't--I don't know. It doesn't make sense. He’s not the kind of abusive father you must think of; he doesn’t crash into the house frothing at the mouth, he ...

Verse Title - Whispers of a Ghost-Ship . “There have been many rumours spreading about my summons today. In order to quench some of the more... unsavoury ones, I shall ...

OK, I like your theme and how you're saying it, but in places, it could use a minor tweak. Here: On most occasions the flaws do not even exist they ...

Okay so. My name's Schem, and I'm here to review your poem. Welcome. :) Now the first thing I find throghout the poem is that you force your rhymes to ...

Chapter 3 - Ill Portent. Despite often seeming like it had lost the will to continue, life went on. In a wholly different part of the same city, a stranger ...

Assination: the process or making something assinine?

I agree with the person saying it switched between child and lover... It's a little ambiguous... Leading to it being... More than slightly creepy in some aspects. Now you overdid ...

Have you happen to have read the 'Merchant of Venice' recently? Or at least I believe that's the one...? Pound of flesh is a typical punishment, it just happens to ...