ScarletMonkey

Ok, a lot of stuff has been edited. I actually took a look at this and realised that the focus isn't that strong. I've got good lines in here but ...

OK, I've edited a fair amount of the original poem without losing anything that important I agree, I did use touch way too much, and I actually always intended to ...

This was a good poem, really great imagery, reminds me of a beautiful painting i once saw in an art gallery.. It was fantastic up to: I could see straight ...

This seriously needs some punctuation, I found it slightly hard to read, I agree with the above, clarity was quite an issue in this piece. And hear a knock on ...

Great stuff here, your use of coffee as descriptions of you and your ex lover was just amazing and very original This is your best work I'd say One small ...

The Black Cat Nothing meant more to me than the black cat, hesitating at the roadside, watching the youth gambol, before the bonnets of moving cars. Were those lovers? Sleeping ...

My friends and I have to live with this names everyday because we're what people would call "emo". we have no one to rely upon or talk to about our ...

This is, to be honest, A really dull poem. I remember my priorities, I sit down and try to write, This was the part where I thought "Oh good it's ...

To be honest, I thought this was one cliche after another, being a bit emo, please don't take offense at what I say, or what I just said. I think ...

The Dying Tree: Lovers Regrowing Nothing can compare to nature; we retread this wooded route, when no art and no poetry, can account for the beauty around me. Even the ...

I'd like to say that I understood this piece but I honestly don't. If it's based on a personal event then that's great but I honestly couldn't find the 'message' ...

I really like how you started with 'I am broken' And ended with: 'I am human' on that last line, it means the poem has gone in a circle, and ...

I've added some punctuation and generally mixed things up a little, I understand what bubblewrapped was saying, I've put it into practise and hope the result makes it an overall ...

To be fair this isn't really an accurate representation of the effect of drugs on someone However It is an excellent example of how psychological illnesses such as schizophrenia and ...

I've edited the last few lines so they seem a bit nicer now Lot less mention of 'eyes' but I've kept the last line of the first stanza because it's ...