Sassykat

It's an excellent piece, and it's obvious you took time to do it, The problem is it really needs more. This is so short you are leaving your readers with ...

Awww, this was reeeeally sweet. :p All I can say is that in poetry you just about always capitalize the first letter of each line unless you are doing one ...

Woooooow. I am in sheer awe of your writing ability. Waaaaaaaooooowwwwwww. *clicks Like* The only thing I would recommend is reading it out loud to yourself. You have some commas ...

Unabashed lush, I, smile You've screwed up the commas a little here, just look a little closer. Read it aloud, it helps, I promise! What a nice poem. It has ...

Yeeeeees! I liiiiike it! I am in a slightly morbid mood this evening so this works. Ooh, it gave me the shivers! I agree with Renn, you should make it ...

Whoo! You have a great poem here. I didn't understand some of it, but my general impression was that you are playing a violin or other stringed instrument. Excellent imagery. ...

Hmmm. Very nice, very descriptive, but it just needs a little more...substance. Why is she running? What is she running from? What happened before this? This is a flash, a ...

Iggy got most of the nitpicks, so I'll finish: So This "so" is not really necessary I know that you’re lying, I’ve been hurt many times, O h, I wish ...

Whoa. Powerful. Scary. Amazing. It flows nicely, and regardless of the somewhat dark content, it has an almost reassuring message. It was a most interesting paradox. Nicely done. All I ...

Haha. I liked it. You should make it into a poem.

Every time our eyes meet, The first note sounds Sudden, clear, and sweet, It's vibrato's rich tone abounds. His smile strikes the second note And a melody takes place. The ...

Tangerine-lit sky Reflecting in his eyes, Complimentary to blue, Deepening their hue. His skin, already gold, Melting in the mold Of my hands, pale and bright Chilled with the coming ...

OMG I love you. I love music, and so I could relate to this! Just a few nitpicks: Keys unlock your secrets The very same that make your music Wasn't ...

I think I can safely assume that you are referring to the group of terrorists that Osama bin Laden led. If this is the case, then yes, I believe that ...

It's got a fabulous idea, if a bit cliche. All the things I noticed were pointed out, except for one thing: Spread it out! I didn't quite finish reading this ...