Sassykat

Great job. A few very general nitpicks, since I'm feeling to lazy to go into detail: -Watch your grammar (mostly capitalization, especially capitalize at the beginning of each line, whether ...

Awww, how sweet! Now, I didn't see anything in particular that a good read-through on your part won't fix. Typos and all that. I'm feeling lazy so I won't nitpick ...

Like LittleLionWomen said, Great job. I loved it. I just have one little critique for you: Watch your punctuation. You have it in some places and not in others. I ...

Ooh. Shivery. I have a few critiques for you. The tears fall from my face, I ’ve fallen from grace. Typically when writing a poem you capitalize the first letter ...

Ah, I liked this. It was relate-able. This is just my opinion, it's fine the way it is, but perhaps add more detail? Why are they feeling like this? All ...

"May, are you ready?" I turned to my best friend, giving her the 'stupid face'. "I don't know, Shanaiya. Are you ready to jump off the edge of the Grand ...

I think that, as long as it isn't anything serious, that it's okay. Saying, "I like someone, and they happen to like me," there is nothing wrong with that. Now, ...

*Gasp* you did such an amazing job with this that I could feel the suffocation of the narrator! I actually stopped breathing during each of those stanzas where you had ...

I've opened the rusty door to my heart Time and time again for you comma, Letting my guard down comma, Believing you had changed. But love, you're still a liar ...

I just have one thing to say: The "I" seems a little off. It's the only one that is a continuous sentance. It should follow the pattern of the rest ...

Well, um, it was sweet. I don't know if you already realized this, but it needs a lot more. One haiku stanza isn't enough to pull of an idea like ...

This was nice. It was very descriptive. All I can say, critique-wise, is that some of the rhymes were pretty forced: [quote]They work together To share the load Of the ...

I lie in Summery sunshine, Same shade as my downy coat. Asleep am I, and quite content To snooze away in dreams afloat. In the next room, a heavy paper ...

My nerves crummbled at the barrage There's only one 'm'. Or maybe a sailor what i saw Doesn't rhyme. Be persistent, please. It wasn't that defined Saying this is totally ...

Haha! This made me laugh. This was awesome. It was not only humorous, but so true! It's a poem that makes one laugh, causes one to nod their head in ...