Sassykat

Okay, first of all, without even reading your story, I can already tell you one thing: SPACE. IT. OUT. Nobody wants to read a story that jumps right into a ...

Well, since the computer wouldn't let you be Junie B. Jones, should we all just call you Junie B.? Maybe that will help. Welcome, aspiring author/poet/(insert desired career in writing ...

I'm looking for positive/constructive feedback and critiques. If you feel like all you want to tell me is "This is your mother, you must love her", then please don't say ...

If I could like this a thousand times, I would. I found nothing wrong with it! It was simply fantastic! Well, I think one could make it a little more ...

I'm going to sing you a classical song; But don't worry, this wont' take too long. Dee dee dah dum, da daa, da doo Badum dee dee dum dee do ...

This was my favorite chapter so far! I only have one little thing to point out, and it's the end. I don't know, it just seemed really abrupt. I think ...

So I watched this 1976 rendition of Romeo and Juliet last night. It was poorly made, even taking into account that fact that it was made nearly 40 years ago. ...

I tried writing a couple sonnets, but I fear I will never match up to this one. Wow, it almost made me cry. But thanks to DrElefant teaching me how ...

Never again will you ever believe, never again will you ever decieve. It's "E, I" since there's a C. Masked by your hate and devilness inside, There's no such word ...

Just to start out with, critique-wise, I just want to say that I was scared of this poem when I first looked at it, and others will be too if ...

This is a contest entry. My prompt word was Lampshade. Don't play me like a gameboard Don't use me like a walking stick That's not what I'm meant for I'm ...

One think to point out: If you are going up, into heaven, what's with the "Swooping Low," part at the beginning? Just a thought. The imagery was great in this ...

Awww, this was so sweet. Just one thing: Typically when writing a poem you capitalize the first letter of each line. Just a thought. It's okay the way it is, ...

I beg to differ, inkwell. I think the comma at the beginning just looks and sounds like a typo. It's distracting and holds no meaning to me. Also, at the ...

Hmm. tgirly got all the ones I noticed except one: your rhyming patter error. They are living in relentless freight, Because of your rhyming pattern, and because it will make ...