Sassykat

I noticed a lot of punctuation errors, but that is it technically. I also noticed that the title had nothing to do with the poem. I liked it a lot, ...

Okay, I like it, but it is in need of some improvement. The first line, the "No longer!" didn't seem to fit in with the quotations. It was just a ...

You know, I didn't particularly like this, but It's an opinionated thing. I am just really religious and don't agree with your last line. I have to wonder, is this ...

Purse your lips against old rolled mary-jane made only--I believe this is supposed to be Mary-Janes, capitalized and plural. from the best imported Columbian black, While you settle back into ...

"Pride, that keeps me going From falling off the ground Whenever I keep on flying---this little bit to the end of the stanza is a little bit awkward. It doesn't ...

You know, to be honest, I found this one to be a repetition of some other songs I have heard. I also found it to be a little awkward, I ...

I completely changed that poem. I do admit, it was a little cheesy, but this is a poem I wrote years ago and thought I might have it checked out. ...

Tentatively, Alexis walked inside the room. If it could indeed be called a room, it was so small. She bit her lip, and gave a little wave. The crying woman ...

Majesty, I insist you awake! That was the first thing Alexis heard after passing out. The man, shaking her, sounded sincerely alarmed. "A-a-lrigh-alright, I'm u-up." The man stiffened, squeezing her ...

Just so you know, it took your explanation for me to make any kind of sense of this song. If you don't use line breaks, you might at least add ...

I step into the night, and feel the cold bite my skin. I spread my wings in phantom flight, and feel that gnawing cold within. I look up and see ...

This isn't supposed to have punctuation, right? I did notice a couple of other things, though, it's that i don't want to remember I knew i was different and so ...

Alexis lay there in a swamp of her own tears for nearly a quarter of an hour. When fourteen years of tears finally dried up, she lay there, pathetic and ...

Okay, I just have to ask, is this intentionally without capital letters? For another, is the punctuation only supposed to be at the end of the poem, or throughout? I ...

Ditto to GuntaFX! First of all, I am pretty sure "categorised" is spelled "categorized." Another, when you do your line breaks, you jump around some from starting the new line ...