Sassykat

This has some fixing up to do, for sure. I feel like you should mention your metaphorical roller coaster before you say the griffon is diving down the 'tracks,' just ...

Look out my window to see a galaxy worth full of new fish This line totally didn't make any sense to me. Other than that, I didn't notice anything. I ...

Okay, this is my new favorite. I love music. So, when asked it I would like to be A member of the band, That first line there didn't seem to ...

This is really interesting, it has a really different feel to it. Maybe some of that is because it's an English assignment, but it's still really good. Stepping and dancing, ...

I liked this, but kind of had trouble understanding it. This is just an opinion, but in this line "It’s gonna be okay." You might change the gonna into going ...

Wow. That's the first thing that popped into my head when I finished this one. Wow. However, there are some mistakes. I only noticed a couple. A shade I am, ...

This was a really interesting poem. I liked it. The message is not unique, but expressed in a unique way. I notice that you suddenly change about for lines into ...

"In this insecurity we turn our pacing circles, that is born in the dim lights of our minds when we lavish our thoughts thoughtlessly." In these first lines, I noticed ...

I first have to say that the transition from the first and second lines was really messy and confusing. Was the Word clothed in royalty? The same thing goes for ...

You certainly can ask that question, Gryphon. My inspiration came from a friend, who has been working on a story of her own even more random than this. I have ...

This was such a cute, refreshing poem! I liked it a lot. It does have it's mistakes, though. For one: Eating and making wormholes This makes it sound like Mr. ...

"In a world filled with angry people" this line seemed just a little bit awkward and long. "I lost my breath." This line was also a little odd-sounding. "And how ...

Sadness utterly my own Only I understand it But it’s possible even I don’t understand it Sadness without a name Alone in its shadowed mystery A Great Wall of misery ...

This isn't the first time I have seen this, but I noticed that your title is not very similar to your poem. It's not as bad as some, but It ...

Okay, I thought this was extremely cute. I really liked it. Some of it didn't make a lot of sense, however, like when he finally came from under the bed, ...