Sassykat

There, I changed it up a little.

Okay. I just have to say that this was BEAUTIFUL. I literally almost cried. I loved it. And I couldn't even find anything wrong...though that could just be that I ...

A dagger pierces, a shout echoes. Clinging on, yet soon panicked into letting go. No reason remaining to stay, like a feather drifting threw through the atmosphere. No haven to ...

When you told me you loved me With such intensity, I didn't feel ready. You didn't understand why not, And neither did I. So you left an angry me behind ...

Passion is a meaningless, Wasteful thing, And misunderstood. Because hate is bitter and terrible and Love is fickle and perverse now. Passion is only a feeling of intensity, Lifting one's ...

You don't understand. You don't even try. You just sit there, Acting like you might be interested, Maybe, If I was lucky, If you cared even a little. But you ...

When I was around you I felt like I knew all. What I didn't know, you taught me. You showed me what it was like to be in love-- Especially ...

"Even though it seems, I might go mad, and break my seams." You don't really need those commas.

Oh. My. Gosh. This was amazing. Okay, first I noticed that your line with the rock-hard, diamond core. If it's diamond, it is harder than a rock, don't you think? ...

The gasping shriek bounces off my skull. This line just sounds weird. If your are gasping, you are inhaling strangely, and if you are shrieking, you are exhaling weirdly. You ...

First thing before reading this is to say that there is a forum for lyrics. Why has caused you to do this to your friends For this line you should ...

I must say, this was...interesting. Really, the only thing I have to say is that the word 'mutant' doesn't ring right to me. But that is just an opinion.

Xanxa and Kharmi were sitting on the floor, merely talking, when Yreahan arrived once more. Majesty, Xanxa, I must ask that you come with me immediately. Your mother wishes to ...

This was an interesting one. Are you referring to birth, or something else, by chance? Also, I think that your line "with marras joking long" needs to be 'along,' and ...

Okay, this was pretty cool. I just have a few questions: why is this person being pushed down the abyss, if indeed that's what it is? "Body forced downwards" doesn't ...