Sassykat

This was interesting. I liked it. It was almost musical, definitely fitting for "lyric" poetry. I like how, in the third stanza, it seems as though this "elf" is, even ...

This was actually a daydream I had a little while ago. My dear friends who know me outside this site, this story does not leave YWS. "What should we go ...

My last daring attempt at making this work! I'm think of random rhymes now, like fork! I believe I was carried to my house by the stork! You open champagne ...

Are we there yet? When will we get there? I don't want to sit On this seat-I don't care That we'll get Ice cream when we're there.

This is indeed poetry, in the artful way you expressed this. I liked it. However, you could make this more recognizable as poetry if you create line breaks. Like so: ...

you are really very creepy with just a little bit of leechy okay, a lot so go away you're too clingy so don't stay

The passion of my existence The reason I am alive and well today The reason I am whole and who I am The first thing I think of when I ...

I can see nothing wrong with this other than the last line. You've used too many commas. here is what I think it should be: Yet never able, always failing ...

I can see nothing wrong with this other than the last line. You've used too many commas. here is what I think it should be: Yet never able, always failing ...

This was....different. I think, though I'm not sure, that this was supposed to symbolize the different views on christ and repentance through different time periods? Let me know if I'm ...

This was pretty amazing. I loved it. I kind of interpreted it as "I know you love me, but you can't know my secrets unless you have the key--or my ...

I changed the entire third stanza, don't be confused by jo's post!

They say that he will come again, He'll save the Earth from all it's sin, And he will love and care for all, Always there for those who call. Helping ...

April 22, 2011 They say he will come again, And save the Earth from all it's sin, And he will love and care for all, Always there for those who ...

April 21, 2011 It's totally too late for me to finish this right, but refer to my first poem. a captive heart is only the start to a captive mind ...