Sapphire

Thanks, Stella! Ah, commas. I must have went through the piece a gazillion times to try and remove some of the one million that ended up in it! Commas are ...

Hey! First off, I'll let you know that on YWS you should post two reviews before posting work of your own, then keep the review to work ratio 2:1 - ...

I'm going to go through this line-by-line. Hopefully you won't think this critique is too harsh, but I think some interesting elements of the poem are being overshadowed by sections ...

You know, despite not fully understanding the meaning of the poem, there's something I really like about it. What confused me about what was actually happening is that the beginning ...

Thanks for another lovely review! The opening scene obviously needs some work, so I'll fix that up, as well as Cinderella glittering. Sometimes when I'm writing, certain phrases and so ...

Hi! I liked this, although there are a few things I would change. Sometimes when you get repetition at the beginning of each stanza it can be incredibly irritating, but ...

You know, this might be the first time I got goosebumps reading a poem here. You picked a great subject to appeal to writers! :lol: However, of course, I do ...

I like this! It's much improved, simply with changes to one stanza and the addition of another. As an aside, I feel like this is more lyrical than dramatic. Perfection ...

Thank you for the great review! I'm really glad you liked it. That original scene was twice as long, but for length I started cutting it down. It was good ...

This is my entry for Stella's 'Fairytales Gone Wrong...' contest. It's a rewrite of Cinderella from a slightly different perspective - it's only one part but it's quite long. Cinderella ...

Hey! Firstly, I think the title should be 'Girls just wanna have fun'. She w a ndered the lonely sodden city streets, the evening’s vain festivities now done. Light caught ...

I started writing when I was five or six and can clearly recall both my first poem and story because they're still in my old writing folder. Actually, I just ...

Weird weekend - worked on Saturday morning as usual, then family from Wales and Aberdeen who we hadn't seen in ages came to visit. I did nothing yesterday except watch ...

Me again! :lol: I seem to have developed a habit for reviewing your poetry. I thought this was brilliant and there was only one minor point I'd change, which I'll ...

Hi! I think this poem has higher potential than it's currently reaching. At the moment, I think it's a bit too much like prose and the poetic techniques are too ...