Sapphire

Hi! I am not whole. I am missing pieces of life [s]The things[/s] That (?) all people should experience. I need a broken heart. No one can truly call themselves ...

I've quoted as well to give suggestions to help the rhythm. The subject is good! Thud, thud, thud. Perhaps I am light-headed, my breath’s too short for air. But when ...

Hiya! I was going to critique this for grammar and so on, but reading it through I'd rather make some suggestions about the story. Firstly, I wasn't sure of the ...

Hi! I’ve just picked out a few typos because I thought the actual content was great. He's just standing there, his hands by his sides, ready to catch him self ...

Hey! I’ve never read this before but I’m glad I have now! But since I’ve never read it before, that means I’ve never reviewed it before, so this will be ...

You know, this strikes me more as prose than poetry. It's very descriptive and well-written, but the lack of poetic techniques and rhythm lead me to seeing it more as ...

Hi aestar! I really loved the criss-crossing! I thought this was great, but I do have some suggestions for you. I'm going to quote the whole thing and score things ...

Thanks clograbby! Oops! I'd had bigger spaces where it switches scene in the middle but they've disappeared! Sorry about that! I'll put in asterisks, though I usually prefer to use ...

Thank you both for your reviews! olivia1987uk, I've sent you a PM. I think you're right about the description. I haven't really conveyed what I see in my head, just ...

“525,600 minutes – how do you measure a year in the life?” There was no answer when Josh knocked on the door. He opened it gently and stuck his head ...

I loved this but there were a couple of points that caught my attention: (Sometimes) I think there should be a full stop in there, like: (Sometimes.) Aesthetically, it just ...

I meant to critique this before and only just realised I hadn't! Although now I'm glad that I waited a while because I think it's one of these poems that ...

What a morbid bunch we are! But it's nice to know you aren't the only one who has ever wondered! Before I go on holiday I always start to think ...

How bizarre that I could feel sorry for a pair of baby shoes! We get so lonely anymore. This has been pointed out already. Is it 'We get so lonely ...

Hi! I think there is one main point you could consider to improve this poem, and that's having a more consistent structure. If you made sure each line had eight ...