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Welcome to the site! I love J. K. Rowling and Harry Potter as well. And your avatar! You've already had the rules pointed out so I'll just say hope you ...

I agree with andimlovegalore on the best stanza, but I have the same uncertainty over what it is you're trying to say. It is a little bit like the first ...

I thought this was really sweet! However, I think there are a few things you could change to improve it further. Your introduction is brilliant! Being extra picky, I think ...

I only read this today, even though it's from last week, and I just wanted to leave a comment and say how much I liked it! The only thing that ...

Hi! I thought some lines in the poem were pretty, but at times it became incredibly confusing. Here's what I mean: Rise of Dreams Smoothly [s]do[/s] they glide, Smoothly [s]do[/s] ...

Hey! There were some great lines in this poem but a couple that raised questions or could be improved. The parasite in my brain Creeps closer and closer. These lines ...

Hey! This reminded me of Phantom of the Opera. (That's good!) I like it more the more I read it. When a poem is so short and simple, each word ...

Hi, and welcome to YWS! Please don't think I'm being patronising, but I have to say that for being 13, you have some great insights into some complex issues. :) ...

Hey! I don't like to see work go without any comments, so here are my thoughts (whether you want them or not)! :lol: I'm not going to go into a ...

As everyone's already said, the idea behind the poem is its main strength. You already have a couple of critiques that look at the grammar and other details, so I'm ...

I had put off reviewing this poem because I wasn't going to be very helpful, but decided to let you know how much I liked it. Firstly, the title. When ...

Wouldn't it be nice if what made us happy would also make our families happy? I have real sympathy for you and I'm going to repeat what you've been hearing ...

She wasn't quiet , but l oud in a sort of helpless, effortless way. - I don’t think ‘helpless’ is the right word here. I understand that you mean she ...

Hey! I really liked these lyrics. However, I agree with all the suggestions chocoholic made, especially the last section. Although it could maybe work if it was sung underneath a ...

Hi Kody! Welcome to YWS. There are lots of different sections to the site - Community and Writing forums, the usergroups and blogs - but the tabs at the top ...