Sapphire

Sorry for taking so long to review this! I'm not going to do a line-by-line crit because you don’t need it. In fact, I could only pick out a couple ...

What I liked about this was how much you managed to convey in so few lines. You tell us a love story and the story of a family, and the ...

Hiya! There was a lot that I liked about this poem. I don't actually feel like it needs more narrative elements (perhaps it should be in 'Other Poetry'?) because to ...

I thought 'Very Emily Dickinson' before I even read your last reply! I loved this, basically. :lol: However, I'm going to question the capitalisation too, even though you're probably sick ...

Hi! I wasn't sure about this at first because of its structure (lots of questions!), but there are elements that could make a good poem. Why is Cupid So cruel ...

Hey! Haven't reviewed one of your poems in a while, so thought I'd take a look at this one. This won't actually be much of a critique, because I really ...

I’m really sorry for taking so long to review this! I started it at the beginning of the week but have been swamped with work! I’m mostly going to point ...

Hey! First, I've gone through the piece making punctuation suggestions and pointing out sections that I didn't think quite worked, then I have a couple of overall comments at the ...

Welcome to YWS! The first thing I would say is to look out for punctuation. "You cant catch me!" I cry . 'Cant' should be can't because it is a ...

I thought this was quite witty. I especially liked the end, and I much prefer the new line breaks. Silly me, I didn't realise the speaker was talking to him/herself ...

We share so many things, You and I: Love and fear, pain and angst. You go on later to say that the difference between them is love, so you need ...

An Ant's Tale The quest : it begins and I scurry around, my brethren with me, all searching for something to eat; That punctuation mark is my only suggestion. :lol: ...

Hi! I thought you had some good ideas, but this seemed unfinished to me. Screams that could pierce any heart Float toward the blackened heavens Chaos The civilized world Gone ...

Hiya! Mother She never thought she would be in this position. Do children not learn from their parents’ mistakes? Did Kerry not learn from her own mother? She dabbed a ...

I had thought that, after her husband's death, she would have wanted to be alone, but she had encouraged me to keep visiting. Our meetings were quieter now. We always ...