Saphirra

Listen everyone! I've decided to post this under advanced critiques, with the whole finished story! if you want to read it, its right there! Also, i'm thinking about posting my ...

Listen everyone! I've decided to post this under advanced critiques, with the whole finished story! if you want to read it, its right there! Also, i'm thinking about posting my ...

Listen everyone! I've decided to post this under advanced critiques, with the whole finished story! if you want to read it, its right there! Also, i'm thinking about posting my ...

Listen everyone! I've decided to post this under advanced critiques, with the whole finished story! if you want to read it, its right there! Also, i'm thinking about posting my ...

Listen everyone! I've decided to post this under advanced critiques, with the whole finished story! if you want to read it, its right there! Also, i'm thinking about posting my ...

I couldn't concentrate on studying for my history test; I was too annoyed by the popular, preppy girls who occupied the table next to mine. I think that the phasing ...

The girl sat in front of the computer while looking out the nearby window wishing she was like the people she saw outside. If i were you I would add ...

So sorry I embarrassed you And maybe ruined your life. Try saying how you did that. And it sounds as though the person hurt her, so wh yshould she be ...

Repulsion twists you all the while, From both the agony and my smile. I know that this is supposed to rhyme, but i think the whole 'repulsion twists you' is ...

Lilian's eyes filled with crystalline tears. Her child had no father. Her baby girl would have to live in a world run by demons. If I were you, I would ...

"Christopher Michael Pressler, I now name you Christopher Michael O'Brien." And from that moment, I started a new life. Please review! Chapter Two Crossing the small park with Sapphira, I ...

I really love the way you completely twisted the story around, and used happy as the evil villain. The thing about the witch actually being nice is interesting as well. ...

Hey! Well, everything's been said, so I'll just say that I hope you like this site. I'm actually pretty knw myself, so feel free to PM me! :D -Saphirra

Wow. I'm not a poet, so i don't know how to critique this, but its amazing. I can totally understand what the poem is about, because thats how i feel. ...

cool, thanks. I'll try and space it out. :D