Sannah

I really like this and am going to read the second chapter after I finish reviewing this! :D I would suggest adding adding an extra line between paragraphs, makes a ...

I was laughing the whole time when she thought she... You know what I mean but... Yeah. I read your other chapters too and thought they were great! And the ...

I prefer having the hardcopy because of several reasons, but I am not saying I dislike the Kindle either. I love my Kindle, but it is not something I would ...

You caught my attention right away with Shawn in the van and not knowing where he was. Your story was easy to read but I beg you to put an ...

I am here to review again like you asked. Now I am hooked! :D I started reading the part where Myra met up with Sammay after waking up in her ...

It's a good, complex plot, but you tend to dump lots of information on the reader, which is very bothersome seeing how then I have to use my brain. Before ...

I was lost. Seriously lost, because of a mixture of things. You didn't add an extra line between paragraphs, you whizzed from normal world to a water world and none ...

I discovered rhyming was easier than I originally thought, but I am clueless when it comes to proper poetry. If my poem doesn't make sense or anything at all is ...

I enjoy the plot but I agree with MiRaCLeS. Do a bit more showing instead of telling. And some more description would add layers to the story. I also feel ...

Your drawings are beautiful!! :D How do you do that? I draw anime too but I am not nearly as good... I can see your characters personalities just by looking ...

I love this story! :) There is nothing I dislike about and it was written very well. It was a really sweet story and sounds like something you could continue ...

That world is so messed up its awesome! :D I really like the plot so far and how you include aliens, witches, mythical creatures, and so much more. This is ...

I thought you did well but I do agree with wickedwonder in terms of more description and letting us know how your characters are feeling. An extra line between each ...

That was really nice... Although, I suggest you put a line in-between each paragraph (and for your first one too) and don't put your dialogue in italics. I think it ...

I agree with all the comments about it being rushed. I also think there were not enough descriptive words and such. Your main character was very much like a camera ...