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This. Is. Amazing. :D The only thing you really need to do is put a line in-between each paragraph so it'll be easier to read. I really liked it, it ...

That was epic. Really good. :) You did a pretty good job at developing the characters for a short story and the plot was very well thought out. There were ...

Holy cat!!! You're writing is amazing! :D I just wanted to tell you how wonderful this piece is. The only thing that confused me was, "If you're gonna bring me ...

That sounds really cool! I ask questions like about life being an illusion so I think that is really awesome. You don't really read many with books asking if we ...

I think if I picked this book up in a store and started reading it, that I would end up buying it. The way you wrote just seemed like a ...

First things first, please put a space between each paragraph. It'll be easier to read that way. So far it seems that you have a really good idea, but you ...

Everybody thank you for the feedback! :) I will soon edit my work and add a lot more description, but I find it hard to write about that when I ...

Now I really want to read the book you are writing... :) I absolutely love it! Sorry if you fall asleep reading this... :D I thought it was really good, ...

So far your story is interesting and has a fairly good hook, jumping right into the action! :) I wonder about specific reasons about why she/he ran away and where ...

I read your other chapters too and I liked them too. :) To make it easier to read, I would suggest putting a line between each paragraph and to start ...

All feedback is greatly appreciated! If you have any advice or nitpicks please metion them. "And exactly what part of that is about me?" I ask. What was with the ...

I like where you are taking the story, but some more description would be nice. Some of your dialouge is a bit awkward and that date that Him had with ...

A periodontist? Or a densist? A vet or a docter of some sort? Just whatever feels right for the character. :)

Reading what MeanMrMustard said, I couldn't help mentioning that there is a type of poem called a definition poem. It closely resembles what you are writing, looks a lot like ...

Thank you for all the feedback! :) I'll remember all of your advice when I rewrite my poem. When I finish I'll post it.