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Re: 1930's Narrative
Hi Fortissimo! I won't do a complete blow-by-blow as I don't have the time at the moment, but I will point out a couple of things. My general impression is ...
Apr 17, 2011 -
Re: Dispair
Sorry guys, I forgot to mention, this is an assignment from my writing teacher. I was supposed to write in a scene where the reader was "zooming in" on something. ...
Apr 17, 2011 -
Re: deleted
Hi lele! First, I really love this poem. I love the message it sends and the way you choose to portray it. It is moving and strong, but not violent ...
Apr 17, 2011 -
Re: My Dream
Hello! To start, nice poem! I can feel the emotions behind it. The poem, overall, is nice, but you need to watch your punctuation and capitalization. My dream was the ...
Dec 29, 2010 -
Re: The Dance
Hey! I like your idea; to me it seems very soft and sweet! Is this poem describing something that happened to you? I belive that if you added a little ...
Jul 2, 2010 -
Re: Scabbards
Scabbards Imperious. That was the word to describe him. Or maybe, arrogant. No, both, at the same time. I had seen him before, on the street. He held his head ...
Jul 2, 2010 -
Re: Dispair
Despair A vast desert, dunes, thousands of miles of sand. Closer and closer. You can see individual mounds of sand now, and, what’s this? There’s a smudge down there. It’s ...
Jul 2, 2010 -
Re: Long Live
Hello imaginemymind! I love your poem- it has a slightly haunting feel to me but is at the same time a beautiful story. The last stanza has some repetition of ...
Jun 11, 2010 -
Re: Reality
Reality Alyce stuck her head out the door of her office, making sure that the Texna-Port man wasn’t there early. The hall was empty, so she quickly hid the little ...
Jun 9, 2010 -
Re: Them
Them I think of all the people I’ve met, And all the people I’ve condemned, Of all the good friends I forget, Trying to act like them I think of ...
Jun 9, 2010
