SASSYLADY333

Super Boy Prologue There it was hanging and gliding back and forth , the villain upside down held by a single rope that kept him alive. He was high in ...

I loved it, you were good with your words and descriptions! And the story has an easy and mysterious flow that leaves the reader wanting more. Loved it! One point: ...

I really liked the first one! Good job, second one needs some orginality, some how it feels like I've seen it before. [ sappy comercials]. I think if you changed ...

Well friend you seem to go into a lot of detail in your stories and include things that are unnesscary. Maybe focus more on keeping the readers attention Amber, but ...

Hey loved! Very promising, good plot so far and description. At first i didn't know if I would like it , but really i loved it. Hope you get more ...

Well you see those things your thinking I want my readers to think.......lol. You'll have to wait and she how Alicia really feels. And the tips were great thank you! ...

I agree with emooly it's not the style in which i could right. But it makes me appricaite the poem all the better. Loved it, it was long though, in ...

Thanks, I'm working in a prologue right this second, lol. Maybe i'll update this and post it in a few days. I'll review some of your work DB93, appreciate the ...

I really liked this poem, it was really enjoyable. As a reader i was pulled in, which is a lot to say about a poem a page long. I think ...

Hello I just joined a couple days ago and I'm ready to review peoples stories as well post som eof my own. I appretiate if people got to Romantic fiction ...

Thanks, your right it was just one big text. :D

Good story! Well you reviewed mine, just returning the favor. I like it, the dialogue is interesting, reminds me of a story I'm working on. I love how diffrent it ...

Thanks, I want to go back and add a lot of detail lol. Plus spelling errors I thought i fixed i didn't my computer crashed a few weeks ago. So ...

True, i guess. I have about twenty pages of Super Boy and JackBauerHasAbald spot liked it. But you may be right maybe chapter one alone is not interesting. I haven't ...

I liked it, had raw emotion that a lot of readers can appreciate. Maybe be careful of run on sentences, and have more paragraphs at the beginning. Besides those I ...