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Adelle I eyed the paper-work warily, worried about what clauses it might contain but the woman took a seat and pushed it towards me. "Feel free to read it and ...

Scipio led Jordan away from the living rooms and towards the weapons room, taking large, confident strides so the other boy had to walk quickly to keep up. "Where are ...

Amber "Good point but really we'll only need two or three meals before we're far enough out to take the ship," I replied thoughtfully. "Collect some food now then and ...

There's a certain episode of Futurama that you should watch XD

"Ow..." Alice rubbed her head absently. "You okay Alice?" Scipio asked, freeing himself from the seat. "Yeah... just hit my head." At that moment, Bella entered the room with an ...

Heather strapped herself in and held onto the seat tightly. If there was thing she hated about space travel, it was forum jumps. "Forum jump in three... two... one!" Adam ...

Go ahead and use more detail. If it includes a rape scene, say that. If it's someone selling themself, say that. If it's mutual, just say it's sexually explicit (if ...

Hello there, welcome to the site! Feel free to ask those questions any time and we'll see if we can help you out. Heather xx

It's brilliant, dear. The characters are wonderful and I love how realistic your dialogue sounds. You've used a good variety of sentences, the description is beautiful, the emotion is tangible ...

The others have given you some excellent ideas on how to improve the grammar of this piece so I'll just give you some general suggestions - I think that first ...

Adelle "Yes ma'am," I replied, looking up at the red haired woman. Her green eyes flashed a smile and she leaned in closer. "How soon can you be ready? Luna ...

Raven We stepped out across the ice, cautiously testing the ground before us, taking the journey a step at a time until we had all reached the solid ground beyond. ...

Arris clung to Griff but the light of the beam intensified and both were pulled upwards towards the opening in the ship. "Help us!" Arris shouted. "Come on everyone, we'll ...

Shush Sureal.

Hey Vernon, sorry it's taken so long to get back to you. Like I said in chat, this is very beautiful and I love the imagery you've used but I ...